Could be great
In truth, after several attempts, I could not complete this story. I really tried, there is most definitely potential there. The thing I found whilst reading, was a lot of useless description, you do not need to write everything that happened when they walked from point A to point B, because of this I found my eyes closing in parts. The main character, while it's clear she has drastic past trauma, is irritating. This, I believe, could be a great story, you can tell the writer has put a lot of effort into it, though, I have no idea what happens in the later chapters. The cover, if changed, could draw more attention, also the cluster of sentences, if broken, would read more clearly. I am not perfect, but constructive criticism always helps. Good luck, I hope you really put in the effort to edit this as best you can and then I will happily give it another go.
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