Welcome Inkers! Here at our new book club, we'll read a new novel of a different genre every month and discuss our thoughts and opinions on the plot and writing style!
Jadin, a Marker, has been tasked with labeling soon-to-be victims and has mastered the art of leaving before they die. By now it is a tired routine, the horror of the idea long-since wrung out. Marking Alli will be easy. Merciful, even. But Alli has never done things the easy way.
Hey guys, I'm so happy to finally get Inkitt's brand new online book club up and running! Now, let's get to it...
We will read a third of the chosen novel each week. Therefore, we will finish by the end of the third week of the month. At the end of each week, we discuss what we've read so far.
As you can see, our first book club read will be 'These Lovely Forms' by LeKat, which I hope you will all enjoy! Once you have finished reading this book, ... See More it'd be great if you could leave LeKat a review and give her some feedback.
Here's the schedule for this month's novel:
End of Week 1 - Read to the end of Chapter 9
End of Week 2 - Read to the end of Chapter 20
End of Week 3 - Finish the rest of the novel
In the next week, feel free to post a little bit about yourself, including when and where you plan to read the book and your initial thoughts after reading the blurb. Next Friday, we'll begin discussions on the first 9 chapters.
I hope you all enjoy the experience and I look forward to hearing everyone's thoughts and opinions!
Happy reading :D
This story was hard to read because the characters were very teen age perspective it was told.
Hi, I quickly went through some of the comments so far and I'm surprised there aren't many more that offer more criticism than there are hence my input may not be that popular. Let me say at the start that there are many great points to the story (the overall idea and plot are great and as I read a lot of indie authors I "read it all" so i can imagine how hard it can be to come up with something original but LeKat manages it, plus both main characters are interesting) but on the overall the ... See More story is let down a bit by it's delivery. Others have noted how Alli's POV chapters suffer from excessive introspection, what I am surprised though is how readily this is attributed to Alli herself as a character rather than the writing. I on the other hand found Alli herself likable enough, she's no more egocentric than any other 17 years old, in fact she's not as bad as some fully fledged adults I know!!!! But when the story was told from her POV there was so much unnecessary rubbish it got me so frustrated on more than one occasion, I found myself urging the story to just get on with it time and time again. For example the time she tells us of her mother coming back home from work: I feel like just to tell us that would have been enough for the continuation of the story, why do we need a lengthy monologue about Alli finding it incredulous how different her mother is at home as opposed to when she's at work? Do we gain anything by that? NO. Yet it distrusted me from the story and I lost the momentum. Was it Alli's fault or LeKat's for choosing to include that in? I think it's a bit of a cop on to treat your character entirely as a separate human being, I believe every author should take the responsibility for the characters they create, they may run away in your imagination but it's you who's telling the story and you should only put things into your story that enrich it, not distruct your reader. And this is where we come to Jadin. I agree with others who believe the story would have benefited so much if we were given a bit of background on his story, maybe it would have helped us understand a bit more why he is the way he is. It could have been incorporated into the plot and ultimately made it better. And was I the only one to notice the lack of any real dialogue? Plain and simple he said she said? Any time anyone said something we were given lengthy explanations as to why how when what by whoever is telling us that particular part. I think the dialogue should be constructed in a way as to exclude the need to explain as as to why that was said. I am not sure how to overcome this shortcoming, I would nearly rewrite the story as a play to learn how to rely on conversations between different charactors for storytelling. The story flow would improve immensely if conversation were not interrupted continuously and the author didn't rely so much on characters' inner musings to understand why things happen the way they do. I can't really write more untill we discuss the book as a whole and are allowed to discuss the plot in mote detail (incl the ending). I really dont mean to be mean, I tried to be as constructive as possible. The story has so much to offer and while good it has the potential to be so much better.
This book is very well written and very engrossing. I read the first three chapters (10 - 12) of our assignment, then Irma hit and we lost power. For five days we were isolated in our community, with no television, no internet, no telephone. (Otherwise we were okay.) When at last I could get back on the internet on Saturday, I decided to read three more chapters. No way. Read all the remaining 8 of our assignment. Just could not stop reading. Then I read all the comments so far. Which
means I can write about topics that have not already been covered.
I like Alli. She sounds like a fun person, but I would prefer her when she is herself and not a mask. The female characters are well drawn, but I do not like the males. They are like so many men I have seen in my life. The man who always gets the girl, even though all the men know he will not treat her properly. The girls never seem to notice, and I do not understand why. Alli and Eve are going after men who are not worth their time, and again I do not understand why. LeKat, there are good men out there. I hope that in more of your writings you will include men who are not shallow cads. Yet overall the book is excellent, and I will now go ahead and read the rest of it. You said you were thinking of a sequel. “Alli and Jadin, the Dynamic Marker Duo”? If you write a sequel, I will read it.
So, here we go, just jumping in.
Ch10-12: Ch10 was an insight in Jadin from an outside CPOV's. Helped to get a better grasp on his character and personality. Ch11 is my second favorite chapter. The way LeKat describes Jadin's taste of goldfish is creative! Ch12 Alli finally breaks a barrier with Jadin, as he allows her to help him. I can't help like how her dream unfolded.
Ch13-15: Ch13 I can't help but wonder if Alli's dream from ch12, is how things would have played out ... See More had she not decided to drive the night of the accident...I think the fact that she had the dream and then saw the news report is only foreshadowing to a greater ability of hers...Ch14's ending wasn't necessarily a shocker, as we were forewarned, but...the fact that Jadin's dream showed him as the murder, was a shock. CH15 is a slow and kind of uneventful, compared to other chapters. Though I felt the information given, was subtly crucial for future chapters.
Ch16-18: Ch16, Alli receives a low blow from Chris and I am proud when she gets up the courage to break it off. I also think learning about the little girl in the picture and the connection that completes the circle with Jadin and Alli's family is sadistically ironic. But I say that with good measure, because it gives the story a twist in the plot that is needed, and makes it a little more interesting. What makes ch17 my third favorite chapter, is the sweet and innocent interaction Danni and Jadin share. There is just a something precious about children (like puppies) that grabs hold of your heart, whether you know it or not. Ch18 had me on edge until the very last word. I just couldn't bring myself to believe he would follow through with his plan.
Ch19 & 20: Ch 19 was extremely short, and I understand the concept of separating ch18 and ch19, but I am wondering if maybe just combining these two chapters wouldn't be so bad. In ch20, I believe Jadin has finally maybe broken through to Alli about the 'there is more to life' concept. She finally is able to see beyond high school and realize she really can do anything. It seems no matter how opposite Jadin and Alli are, like Jadin points out, they really do have a lot in common. I'm not a huge believer in the notion 'opposites attract' because you still need to have common ground, and sometimes being too opposite can tear you apart. But, with that being said, Jadin and Alli share a good balance between each other.
***Side note: LeKat, if you want an example of how you could improve the beginning of the story, so you are not backtracking with Jadin, I can email you the first few chapters of another story I have written, that I will eventually post on Inkitt, once I edit it. But it might help you get ideas on how you could edit Jadin's POV so he isn't backtracking so much. I started writing the book with this in mind, as I would always get frustrated with books that backtracked all the time. It made it difficult for the story to progress.
I do have to say, though, that Jadin's POV has definitely improved through the chapters, and even some backtracking is very subtle now, and in certain instances, is important.
LeKat, Why not include the quote from Wordsworth's poem in the introduction to your story . . . or have Alli recite part of the poem at an appropriate time. Reading the words as an introduction or part of the dialog will give a richness to your story, Even the readers who haven't read Wordsworth will realize the significance of the words..
I read the first half and I admit I might have been carried away and read more.
I loved it, totally. It turned out better by the time I reached chapter 9.
Jadin is my favourite character so far and I doubt that will ever change.
I hope it ends up well 😊.
Liking this so far :( even though this genre always makes me sad. If anybody sees the crying face emoji sometimes, im ok. Im ok lol. I'm on chapter 5 btw. All I can say so far is that everything is structured nicely and the characters so far are interesting x
LeKat weaves an interesting tale of fantasy and what-ifs. The mid-section of her story would be strengthened by less telling and more showing. The difference between good writing and great writing is in the details, Great writing is the goal of all aspiring writers, or should be. A little more tension would make Jadin's sojourn back to earth more gripping. Suspense and comic relief are important elements in any manuscript..I admire the writer's tenacity. Despite her busy schedule, LeKat finds ... See More time to pursue her dream. Kudos to her! If she continues to write from her heart, she has a bright future. Question for the author:. Why These Lovely Forms? For me-though the title is catchy-it doesn't do justice to your story.
Enjoy reading new and exciting works, embrace the opportunity to share ideas and respect the opinions of other readers
Every month a new genre will be chosen and a choice of two or three books from that genre will be uploaded onto our social media accounts for you to vote on - whichever book shows to be the favourite will be read that month
Different goals will be set every month depending on how long the book is and once the goal has been achieved, we can then begin discussions (therefore, book discussion won't begin until the start of week 2)
If the chosen novel is entered into our free writing contest - in order to keep the contest fair and treat every author equally - the reads that have come directly from the book club will not affect the author's chances of winning
NO spoilers - please do not ruin the story for other readers, feel free to discuss whether you're enjoying the story or not but please wait until the goal deadline has arrived before you begin discussing plot-lines
When you have finished the novel, it'd be great if we could all leave the author a review
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