I found this to be a very disturbing tale, about many people all over the world becoming catatonic, in what might be an attempt by extraterrestrial beings, trying to take over the Earth. What I found most disturbing was that I was unexpectedly drawn in to the frightened characters, and actually shared their feelings of dread. For me to have a reaction like that, means that this is an outstanding work of writing, which I would recommend (with caution) to anyone.Read the story now
This writing is somewhat confusing in places. The narrative suddenly switches from one unidentified place to another, and one unidentified time to another, without any transitional phrasing. It’s also hard to know who is saying what. The speaker is not identified before what he or she says is quoted, but at the end of the quotation.
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"The Pub Crawl"
A very entertaining and disturbing tale, about the beginning of an unexpected crime spree. Four women are barred from entry into a trendy nightclub by the bouncer. They decide to take vengeance on him. Things get out of hand. If this is only the first chapter to a longer story, I would truly look forward to reading more. It’s something I’d be reluctant to put downRead the story now
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